As I do not have some of the photos yet, I drew some of them to make up for it. I would take the photos as soon as possible.
Here is my edited story board with photos and drawings. I will also add in the descriptions on the setting, transitions, effects and sound/music for each frame.
Setting: This is the drawing that the guy gave to the girl when they were in the last year of their primary school education. They have a liking for each other but they never tell each other so. The drawing is a way that the guy shows his liking for her.
Transition: It will slowly fade in from the back.
Effects: It will have an effect of film age (old) to show that the drawing is very old.
Music: I'm still on the lookout for a suitable song/music. At the beginning, it will have a more soothing type of feeling.
Setting: 10 years later, there was a primary school gathering. The guy managed to meet the girl once again. It will be a series of photos of that gathering.
Transition: It will appear diagonally (cross out) to signify that their paths cross once again.
Effects: The photos will ease in and ease out on the two main characters. I black out the other people to elevate the couple's status.
Music: It will be one of a cheerful tone since they managed to see each other again after such a long time of separation.
Setting: The next series of photos are depicting the dating period of the guy and girl before they are officially a couple. It shows the activities that they have done together.
Transition: I will use the circle effect to show that they have come full circle and they have the chance to be together now.
Effects: I will probably use ease in and ease out.
Music: I will be using some soft music here.
Setting: At Istana Park. After a period of dating, the guy decided it is time to ask the girl to be his girlfriend. I will show some more shots of him doing so.
Transition: I will use the heart-shaped effect to show that love is in the air.
Music: Soft music.
Setting: The next series of photos will be of them having the good times. I will also show the significant events/days during their courtship such as Valentine's Day, their birthdays, Christmas, their overseas trips and their anniversaries.
Transition: I will use the fade effect.
Music: Soft and soothing music.
Setting: The next series of photos show that not all goes well in their relationship. They quarrel over almost any thing. It will show the sad and turbulent period in their relationship.
Transition; I will use the shatter effect to show their relationship is on the brink of breaking up.
Music: Sad music
Setting: The next few shots will be that they settled all their indifferences and quarrels and they still love each other. No matter what comes their way, love prevails.
Transition: I will use the heart-shaped effect again.
Music: Soft music
21 comments:
Pretty straightforward, easy to understand. Some suggestions for songs would be probably abit of 70s music style rock for the happys, abit of violin for the sads.
Do add more pictures too, and some transitions.
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probably in the quarrel part you can add in "our first quarrel" since you had in the first place our "first" of everything. nice idea!
i think it's pretty much a mundane love story. maybe not a 'relationship' mv, but a segment of it will work wonders.
I like the way they met, something familiar yet sweet.
twist the story a little, i think it will work better.
I thought the painting that begins the romance should be more "romantic" :P like a picture of a rose, or a picture of a girl and a boyy maybe?
I like the story. But not so sure about the pictures... I think you might need most pics to be without you actually looking into the camera. Like a snapshot of two of you walking.... Looks less like a diary account that way and far more interesting.
Also the istana shot should have you in it. (Ok I didn't read ALL the details I dunno if u said you will be doing this lol)
But again, love the story. N even cooler that its true
I think you can play out more on the turbulent period to add in more stuff into your video since fighting and quarrels are part and parcel of the couple's life. So the for the conclusion part of the holding hands part will be more touching. I hope...
It's true that love isn't always so smooth-sailing and it was nice to see you portraying that in the story with quarrels and memories happiness.
I feel that the story started out well, but in the middle, it started losing the essence and it seemed to me that the story didn't hold together well enough.
Perhaps you can try using some words on separate scenes before showing the pictures. :)
I think the story has the typical 'childhood sweetheart' lovestory. Maybe you can add in some more singaporean-ish elements or it would seem like we already know the story in the beginning. eg flag raising in school...etc. or emphasize more on v-day since its a valentines day story. I like the story, I just feel that from the beginning I know the whole story already and that there needs to be something different to spice it up.
Hi,your story is pretty straightforward but I think the sequence got me a little confusing. Is it they met at a gathering, then became a couple, then proposal then valentines again? Nevertheless, the ending seems nice...Happily Ever After.
To jxn:
Thanks for your suggestion for the music choice. I will search for it.
As it is only the initial storyboard, I didn't insert too many photos. I will definitely add in more for the video.
To falafie:
That's interesting though I can't really remember our first quarrel haha. I will check with my girlfriend haha if she doesn't clobber me first.
To eileen ong:
Thanks for your suggestion. Personally, I also feel there is not much twist in my story. Probably due to my own relationship is not that topsy-turvy haha.
I will try to add in some twists in the end.
To anonymous1:
I choose that drawing because I'm the guy who drew that and gave it to my girlfriend hahaha.
If I choose something else, it may not have the effect that I want.
Thanks for your suggestion though. If my own drawing doesn't work out, I will consider others.
Hey Chris,
First thing first. Awww so sweet, ey very touching la, i read until i also want to cry. Haa i like it. It has that emotional impact on me.
Maybe you can add in more actions such as scenes portraying you working/walking hand in hand together with your girlfriend?
I think the story line has the emotional aspect for the viewers. And it brings about the reality of a relationship. So maybe more drama and action between you and your girlfriend like how you both quarrel? any throwing of plants or plates? haha... just alittle of what i think may help.
Kudos to you
To bex:
Firstly, thanks for your suggestion.
I most probably have to use a tripod to take the photos. It certainly will test my skills haha.
As for the Istana shot, my girlfriend and I will be in the photo haha.
To hong kheng:
Yup I will add in more shots of the quarreling to contrast that of the final frame of holding hands till the end.
To yuanxue:
Yup I agreed the story gets a bit weak in the middle. I'm still thinking of more shots that I can add in. I will consider your idea of adding in the words ya. Thanks.
To anonymous2:
The primary school that I was in was torned down though. A pity I couldn't go back to take some photos. I probably will go to a primary school to take some photos and photoshop them.
I will try to add some twist too to make it more interesting.
Personally I like the part of the story during the primary school gathering and you guys got together once more. Would be really interested to see the actual video.
I think the story could be a little more dramatic during the turbulent times. The audience will then fear that almost all hope is lost, however in the end, love prevails still.
To anonymous3:
Yup the couple went to the same primary school, then a gathering 10 years later, then the proposal and they spent their first valentine's day.
Nothing to do with the assignment. This is my personal view. I continuously see how you change from 2208. You become more gentle and handsome after dating a girl. jl
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